what+adults+don't+understand+about+kst


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What adults don’t understand about teens and their wants?
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I don’t understand why adults don’t get that when us teens want things they call us spoiled.

Also if they feel we are being spoiled then why don’t they make us do chores or something to earn money so we can buy the things we want?

If adults don’t do that then they will have to understand they have to buy us things till we can take care of ourselves.

The adults also need to understand that some of the things we ask for we need and can be used for safety like a cell phone.

So the adults also need to understand that we will ask for stuff but they don’t always have to buy it right away.
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The things that adults need to understand are we are not spoiled, we still need their help, and the stuff we ask for we do usually need.

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 * I love the subject of the paper and its a really good first paragraph. But the phrase "the adults" seems to be repeated too much.**

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First of all the thing that I don’t think is fair __I__ that when we teens ask for money often the adults almost always think we are spending it on useless __thing__ when we are using it for lunch or gas.

Then when we ask for things when we go to the store they think they spoil us to much or they feel we get to many clothes __or whatever__.

They also feel that we don’t appreciate the things we get when in reality we __do we__ just don’t think about as often as we should.

Also they think the stuff that we get is __to__ expensive but they need to understand that we can’t control the prices and we don’t shop at Toys R Us for toys any more we are too old for that.

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 * This is a well written paragraph. Look at the underlined things. The "i" in the first sentence should be "is" and the "thing" in that same sentence should be plural. The phrase "or whatever" lessens your argument so I suggest that you replace that with something else. Inbetween the "do we" there should be a comma.**

What the adults need to understand is that they still need to help us __teen__ with buying objects and necessities.

They need to help us pay for things because we are still too young to have jobs or to drive cars on our own. Also a lot of us don’t have time for jobs because school is our job right now and we need to do our homework and projects and that does not leave a lot of time for jobs.
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If they feel we need to get jobs or be more responsible they can give us things to do around the house and we can make money that can help pay for our stuff.

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 * This paragraph brings up very good points. In the first sentence the "teen" should be plural.**

Adults also need to understand that when we ask __fir__ this stuff we really do need it. Cell phones are something we all ask __for we__ really do need these.
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The main thing we need cell phones for is safety like if we are stranded or if someone is trying to steal us we can just call them or 911 for help.

Clothes and shoes are also something we ask for.

These things are major things we need because if we did not get __cloths__ we would all be walking around not dressed and that would be no good.

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 * This is a really good paragraph but watch the spelling. Inbetween "for we" there needs to be something like an "and."**

So the adults need to understand that there are always reasons why we ask for things.

They also need to think twice before they walk around and __cal__ us spoiled because they were probably just like us back then. Also the adults need to cut us some slack because we are still young and are learning how to fend for ourselves and we need help.
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 * Really good conclusion. Once again watch for spelling.**