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 * __What Parents Don't Get About Teen Life in School__**

__Introduction__ Loud noises, hurried movements, crowded and tight spaces, easily flared tempers; no, this is not the busy city traffic during rush hour, this is high school. High school is a completely different world than what adults know or are used to.

They don't realize what we go through every day, they don't understand how everything can be good one day and then horrible the next, like a bipolar disease. **"go through every day, AND they don't understand..." 1205112289** Our emotions each day are pulled in different directions with all the stress we encounter.

It’s hard to be a teen these days. Why is it hard to be a teen these days?1205202630 This crazy world we encounter and its unpredictable problems and outcomes is something teenagers like me experience everyday from the moment we walk through the heavy metal doors of our school. Adults just don’t understand that school for us comes with the added anxiety of grades, peer pressure, and the importance of creating and maintaining an individual reputation.
 * instead of "problems and outcomes", maybe something like "situations" 1205112289**

__1st Body Paragraph__ How can a simple letter create such a commotion? Grades are a big part of high school.
 * maybe move this sentence to after, "they are something that most kids...." 1205112289**

They are something that most kids in high school worry about and something that almost every parent pesters about. **"...something that most students in high school worry about..." 1205112289** I try to do my best in every class, but I should not be penalized when I fall short sometimes. Because I have a life, I don’t want to spend every minute at home locked in my room studying. Yes, i agree most kids cannot.1205202630 At times, academics are the last thing on my mind when I have other stuff going on around me. Also, the teachers affect the way our grades come out. **"also, OUR teachers..." or, "also, teachers..." 1205112289** Let’s say I have a teacher that teaches in a way that I don’t comprehend or I have a teacher that grades really tough. **"...in a way that is difficult to comprehend..." or something along those lines 1205112289** These situations make it almost for me impossible to get a perfect grade.

My fellow students and I have many classes and it’s extremely difficult to do well in all of them, especially when considering Carmel Catholic’s intensely harsh grading system.

I’m already hard on myself and am aware that my grades affect my future, therefore, I (and other teenagers like me) don’t need the additional annoyance in my life of my parents constantly nagging me about my responsibilities to do well in school. __2nd Body Paragraph__ Everyone experiences peer pressure in high school, whether you experience currently or thirty years ago. What parents don’t know is that sometimes after having all that pressure at school, we come home to the sanctuary of our room to get away from all the stress. **"...after having all the pressure at school..." or, "...after having so much pressure at school..." 1205112289** Putting things on us like chores, errands, etc. are not things we want after a coming home from the strict demands at school.
 * "...therefore I, and other teenagers, don't need the additional annoyance of parents constantly nagging about my responsibilities..." or something like that 1205112289**
 * "...whether you experience it currently or did so thirty years ago." 1205112289**

Even though a lot of kids do not subside to peer pressure, the avoidance and prevention of making destructive decisions or being stuck in sticky situations gets tiring after a while.

This is when we teens just want to escape the world of high school and be relaxed and not have worry about anything. **"...escape the world of high school, relax, and not have to worry..." 1205112289** I’m not saying that school is this horrible place that I have to go to, I like school, but there is a lot of nervous tension that is hard to handle sometimes.

Parents should not pile onto the strain of worry we have on us at school by continually irritating us about pointless things at home, when home is supposed to be our safe haven. __3rd Body Paragraph__ Let’s face it. I think you should put a comma after it and combine this sentance with no one wants to be.....1205202630

No one wants to be the person considered “the loser all by themselves”.Instead on saying no one wants 4 times you could say it once and use commas after each one.1205202630 No one wants to be the person that nobody knows or remembers.

No one wants to be the person that everyone whispers about as you walk by.

No one wants a bad reputation.

Kids in high school have to create a reputation that suits them and one represents their best qualities. It is hard to make and maintain a perfect reputation, ESPECIALLY at a small school where everyone knows everything about everyone! There’s really nothing that’s swept under the rug.
 * "...and one THAT represents..." 1205112289**

So, you better not do or say something that you don’t want the entire school to find out about. The way you dress, the way you smell, the way you do your hair, the way you apply your makeup are all things that will be looked at when walking through the hallways of high school. **"...the way you do your hair, AND the way you apply your makeup..." 1205112289** Eyes are on you at all times and gossip spreads like a wildfire. **"...at all times, and gossip..." 1205112289** For that reason, you must be aware of your whole being all the time. This is one of the things that teens stress out most about.

How can I make friends?

Will people like me?

Who will I sit with at lunch?

Those are all common questions of teens that go to school.I do not think you need this sentance because it is self explanitory.1205202630 It is a lot to have on your mind, and not something that is easily said or done because you have to be on point about your reputation constantly. The anxiety of this causes some teens to collapse under the weight of being “cool” or “liked.”

Personal identity is a big deal and sometimes obsession to those who attend high school. __Conclusion__ The weight that is bearing some teens down today from high school having to do with grades, peer pressure, and making a reputation for yourself are things that some cannot handle. **"the weight that some teens are bearing today in school from grades, peer pressure..." 1205112289** I believe to help teens like me to not crumble under the pressure, adults need to be aware of what we go through at school and not add on to the incredible about of anxiety we already have in our lives. **"...incredible amount..." 1205112289** If our parents recognize and respect this, I think it will become a little easier for us to deal with what we experience day to day in our separate world.
 * "...and sometimes AN obsession..." 1205112289**

1205112289 I agree i thougt this story was really good and do not change any big parts but you could change some minor parts. 1205202630**
 * Overall, very good. You make some very good points and present ideas from very realistic situations. I am a stickler for grammar, especially commas, but those corrections aren't that big of a deal; it's just what I would do.