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What Adults Don't Get About Texting
Texting is a lot of fun.

I can't even describe the feeling a person gets when they text.

It's amazing to me.

I love texting.
 * it seems like these first few sentences are really short, try to combine them 1205098103**
 * I agree with hla. Try to expand your writing to make it sound more intelligent.** 1205120555
 * I also agree. Also, they all seem like all four of the sentences have no point. I understand your topic is to describe how kids need texting and what parents don't understand but these sentences don't catch my attention or make me want to read on.1205184848**
 * I on the other hand, think that couple short sentences are a cool way to get your point across without having to resort to long boring adventures with a sentence. Good job!1205201668**

The first time I tried it, I was in eighth grade.

I was playing with my friends phone and decided to try it.
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The reason that it took me ten minutes to type one simple and short message to my friend was because I don't have texting.
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That's right, I am deprived of the one thing that makes cell phones so cool and utterly amazing.

My parents, finding texting unnecessary, rear that I will text during school hours and spend too much money.
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 * This raises a good point however i don't really know what it means but it sounds good.1205201668**

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Whenever I always bring up the topic of texting, I get an eye roll from my mom and a stern look that says "I'm prepared for war" from my dad.
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 * I think you should change the arrangement of the last part** to say something **like "and a stern look from my dad that says..."1205184848**

It is very obvious to me that they don't think that texting is necessary. They argue that I should just call my friends and talk to them on the phone, but they don't understand how unnecessary calling people can be- especially if you just have to ask them one, simple question!
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They also often say that if I want to talk to someone, I should just go to their house and talk to them, but that just makes things more inconvenient most of the time, due to the fact that they would have to drive me and pay for the gas anyways! They might as well just pay for the texting bill!
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Another reason why I believe that they think texting is unnecessary is because they never grew up with it themselves, so they don't understand that no one hardly ever calls their friends anymore. They text them!
 * Change the "no one hardly" part it doesn't really make sense.1205184848**
 * I like the point you made about how parents didnt grow up with texting, so they are not used to it 1205098103**

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They say that texting during school is also a major issue.

They fear that I would text during class or text someone answers to a test, even though I know darn well the consequences of that!

In fact, it says in the Carmel Catholic Student Handbook that the very act of cheating degrades my character and reputation and damages the learning process. So the only person I would be hurting is myself.
 * I understand the point you're trying to make but I don't think that saying it's in the Handbook proves that you wouldn't do it.1205184848**
 * Not sure you should mention Carmel since we don't know that you are a student there.1205201668**

Why would I want to risk getting caught by texting someone else?

I think that I would be able to handle turning my phone off at school because I don't need it during school hours anyways.

Plus, talking to my friends at school doesn't cost me anything, so why would I waste money texting them when I know that I'd be seeing them when the bell rings? P
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 * I thought that you made your point very clear in this.** 1205120555

Money is also a major issue between my parents.

They don't want to pay ungodly amounts of money for the enormous texting bill that would come each month.

A solution to this problem would be to get a plan for my phone only to have unlimited texting.
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A lot of companies, including Verizon, have reasonable texting plans.

Plus, if I go over my texting limits, I would be willing to pay for the overage charge.

Another good way to resolve this problem would be to get a job and start paying my phone bill by myself.

I'm almost sixteen now anyway so I could then apply for a job and start paying for the bill!
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 * You really show how you're independent and maturing when it comes to the responisbilites of a phone, through this paragraph.**1205120555

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After hearing all of my friends trying to convince me to get texting, I have finally decided to talk to my parents about the issue.

I was so tired of hearing, "Why don't you just text your friends instead of calling them?" In the future, I hope to talk to my parents about texting and maybe they will finally understand its importance to me.
 * Saying "I was so tired of hearing..." makes it sound like you already got texting1205184848**

Maybe they will finally realize I am a responsible enough person to follow whatever rules they establish in regards to texting.
 * Not too many major issues wrong here it's pretty solid.1205201668**

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